高考英语作文求详细批改
假如你是李华,你的澳大利亚笔友Mark对中国高中生的毕业庆祝活动很感兴趣.他来信想了解这方面的情况.请按照下面内容给他回信.1,介绍常见的庆祝当时及利与弊2,你认为更有意义的庆祝当时及理由100词左右
DearMark,
Gladtohearfromyou.I’mveryhappythatyou’reinterestedinthewaysthatweChinesehighschoolstudentscelebrateourgraduation.(括号前为题目中提示的括号后为我自己写的)
InChina,thecollegeentranceexaminationisreallyimportant,sostudentswillrelaxthemselvesalotafterit.Manyofthemhavepartiesandholdgreatfeastsinvitingtheirrelativesandclassmates.Thatcreatearelaxingatmospherebutreallycostalotofmoney.Someofthemgotravelingaloneorwithfriends.Theytraveltoplacestheydreamof,andevengoabroadtoexperiencelife.Travelingisgoodbutsometimescanbedangerous.Alsostudentswriteabouttheirbestwishestofriends.Wefeelwarmatthesenotesbutsadtoleavehighschoolforever.
Ithinkthemoremeaningfulwayofcelebratingitistodosomesocialwork.Socialworkcandevelopeyouroverallabilitiesandalsopromoteawarenessofhelpingothers.Italsoindicatesthatyouareanadultandtakeyourresponsibilitieswell.
(后面的格式是题目中给的固定的)
Bestwishes!
Yours,
LiHua
提供详细批改包括
短语用得不对的地方语法错误低级错误
更高级的句型润色的建议
作为高考作文不足之处
和优秀文章的差距
谢谢!