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这篇托福作文大概是什么水平?Youhaveenoughmoneytopurchaseeitherahouseorabusiness.Whichwouldyouchoosetobuy?Givespecificreasonstoexplainyourchoice.正文Atfirstglance,purchasingabusinessseemstobemorestableand
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这篇托福作文大概是什么水平?

Youhaveenoughmoneytopurchaseeitherahouseorabusiness.Whichwouldyouchoosetobuy?Givespecificreasonstoexplainyourchoice.

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Atfirstglance,purchasingabusinessseemstobemorestableandsafe.However,ifIamtheonewhohasenoughmoneytopurchaseabusiness,thenIwilldefinitlychoosetoownabusiness,whichisexcitingandchallenging,ratherthanpurchasingahouse.

Firstofall,themainreasonwhyIwouldmakethisdecisionisthatowningabusinessismylifegoalandmydream,andhavingenoughmoneytopurchaseonewouldbeachanceofalifetimetome.AlmosteverythingIdoinschoolnowisasteptowardthisgoal,therefore,thereisnowayIwouldmissthischancejustforhousing,whichIdon'treallyhavetoworryaboutatthispoint.

Secondly,ahouseisastablepropertywhileabusinessmeansunlimitedpotential.Youcanmakemoremoneybyrunningabusinessifyoutakegoodcareofitwhileahouse'spricemaygoingupanddownunexpectlywithoutyourcontrol.MostpeopleperfertocontroltheirpropertyandsodoI.Inaddition,ifyouindeedearnmoremoneybyrunningthisbuinessthenyouwillabletousetheadditionalmoneytopurchaseahouse.Purchasingabusinessmakeitpossibletoownbothabusinessandahouse.Thus,itseemstobeamoreattractivechoicetome.

Lastbutnotleast,Iamapplyingforbuinessinuniversitytoextandmyknowledgeinthisarea,whichmeansIwillatleasthavethebaiscknowledgeneededtooccupyabuiness.Basedonmyexperience,mostpeoplechosetopurchaseahousebecausetheydon'thavetheverybasicknowledgetokeepthebusinessgowellandtheyperferstablelife,whichisanotapersuasivereasonforme.EventhoughIamfullyawareofthehardnessofrunningabusiness,IwouldliketofacethechallengeafterIlearnthebasicknowledgeIneedinuniversity.

Inconclusion,IbelieveIcanbemorebenefitednotonlyphysiclybutalsoemotionalbychoosingtopurchaseabuisnessbecauseofmydream,thepotential,andmyfavourofchallenge.

陈静回答:
  看起来似乎很完整可是仔细看就说了三个点每个点都不深   一.一桩生意是你一生的追求   二.生意相比较房产有更大的升值空间   三.你有basicskills相比较于那些不是business专业的人   你的例子要不就没有,要不就不够specific,好比第一点,为什么一桩生意是你一生的追求,应该说有了一桩生意你就有了成就事业的资本,这样写一是可以上下衔接,和下段的潜力有机结合起来.第二段的潜力,你只是自己拼命说生意比房产有潜力,但是没说为什么对不对?在中国很多人都把房产当做生意做,炒房不是生意?不比生意赚更多钱么?这里你就要说出你自己的理由,好比房产只是生意的一部分而且现在的房产泡沫让房产不一定赚钱,所以你选择一桩生意.第三点相对算是好一点的,但是凸显自己的同时,别去贬损那些没有学business的买房产的人,ETS的改卷是很忌讳这些的.   好了,lz语言还过得去,但是思路需要更加西化,而且要言之有物.   希望对你有所帮助,我的作文也只有27分,水平有限,不当之处,见谅.
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