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Afewweeksagoanewspaperquizedsomeyounggirlsinschool."Doyouthinkyouarefat?"Morethanahalfgirlsgavethepositiveanswerevenifmostofthemlookedverynormally.
Lilyisaseniorstudentwholooksalittlefatbutveryhealthy.Shewasdubbed"smallpig"byherclassmateswhothoughtthatitisakindlynickname.ButLilydoesn'tthinkso.Shehasbeenfedupwithitalongtimeandtreatedthenicknameasanironyforthatimpliessheisasfatasapig!Soshegotunderwaytoloseweighttogetridoftheharassment.
Atfirstsheknewthatthereisakindofsurgerycanhelphergetthin,whichisverycostlyandhasalotofdownsides.Itisinadvisableforher,shethought.Afterthat,shefoundanadvertfromthenewspaperthatthereisakindofdrugastheauxiliarytherapycanhelpspeopleloseweightquickly.
Alikefindingthesilverbullet,sherushtotheshoppingmalltobuyit.Afterrunningoutthistablets,shehaslost10kilogrammessuccessfullyandpossessedasatisfiablestatureandgaveallherclassmatesastartlingalteration.
Butshealsofeltbleakfrequently.Thedoctortoldtoherthatthisdrugistabooinmedicallyanditcanleaduptochronicanginawhensheiselderly.Ifshecontinuestoeatit,itmaycausedeadlyresults.Thoughsheisthinnow,it'sunenviableforher.Lilygetnobeneficialfromherbeautybutdespairedforlosingweight.
Goodflavoursstillattractsherlikeamegnet.Shenowunderstandsthatlosingweightmustcountonexercisingandweshouldwatchoutforwonder-drughypeduringdailylife.
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